Cyrus walked easy, a pretty young girl by his side. He talked, and she giggled.
Things were so different now. He could remember when there was nothing here save a small village and wilderness. Those were simpler times, but things change over hundreds of years. There was no stopping it.
His kind had worried at the beginning of this age, that The Hunt would be hampered with all the light, but the prey was attracted to light, like moths.
Slipping into an alley, he went for her neck. She moaned her ecstasy and pressed against him.
Cyrus drained her life.
WC: 100
Pages: 1 2
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This was so smoothly written, Russell… I didn’t immediately know what his kind was ’til I was meant to!
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Oh thanks! I’m glad it worked. You never really know ’til someone else gives it a read.
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It did. I rather liked it 🙂
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Those kind of hunters don’t need any help! Chilling story.
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They sure don’t!
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Nicely done, Russell. The nostalgia was a great piece of misdirection
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Thanks Neil!
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Yikes! Only you could look at a photo of a bus and come up with a vampire story. 🙂
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That is such a compliment!
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You built the story smoothly to a chilling end. Very well done!
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Thanks Brenda!
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Great direction to take the prompt. Didn’t see the vampire coming at all.
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Thanks!
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Í was surprised as she was by those final five words. Delightfully different Russell
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Thanks Keith!
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I’m not a fan of vampire stories but you disguised this one so well that I take my hat off to you. Just not my scarf, though… Good one.
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Thanks Sandra! I can see vampire/zombie/werewolf type stories being an acquired taste. I’ve read some good and some not so much. Glad you liked mine!
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Your first hint gave me the shudders. He could remember hundreds of years ago. “Vampire!” says I. Dead girl. The writing is superb.
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Thanks Linda! So happy you liked it!
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Nice genre twist, well done.
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Thanks Iain!
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I like how the girl seemed to enjoy going to her Maker in this way. Having not read much vampire or horror lit, this was new to me.
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Oh, those vampires can be sneaky like that!
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Good vampire story. You eased through it so naturally. And it seemed his prey didn’t suffer. Well done!
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Thanks Sascha!
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