#FridayFictioneers – Ready To Go

PHOTO PROMPT © Ronda Del Boccio

Rob lifted his head above the top step and looked through the planters at his old life before laying back again in a spreading pool of blood.

Jen screamed nonstop curses from the window above as he lay there, his life leaking onto the brick.  She threw his phone.  Plastic and glass shattered inches from his head, peppering his face.

So much for calling 9-1-1, he thought closing his eyes.  It would be over soon.  Will that be so bad.  

Curses fell from above like rain along with drawers full of his clothes.

I’m ready go anyway, he thought.  So ready.

WC:  100

After struggling for ideas the last couple of weeks, one finally showed up without too much searching.  Hopefully I did it justice!

#FridayFictioneers is a weekly blog link up hosted by Rochelle over at RochelleWisoff.com. You should totally check it out and perhaps try your hand at writing a 100 word story.

Good luck!

19 thoughts on “#FridayFictioneers – Ready To Go

  1. You’ve written a good story, and written it well. Telling the story from the pov of a dying man is unusual and distinctive. The description is crisp and appropriately violent. The only line about which I have any reservation is “Curses fell from above like rain along with drawers full of his clothes.” Zeugma is usually employed for humorous effect. On the other hand, you get away with it (just! I didn’t notice it on the first read, but it brought me up short second time through) – and it may be part of your unique voice, so take what I say with a barrow-load of salt!
    Several of the Friday Fictioneers have distinct individual voices – you read a story and you know it’s theirs even without the by-line. A few more like this and you’ll be joining them, I suspect.

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  2. I have to echo what Penny had to say. I did have to look up “zeugma” because I just couldn’t pull it up from the depths of my grey matter 🙂 I stopped on that sentence, though, and just wasn’t sure why. Now I am. Anyway, yes, I loved the POV here and the willingness of this poor man to accept death. Seems his life wasn’t exactly full of joy.

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  3. The sentence starting ‘curses fell’ enabled me to really feel for Rob. And ensure that I recalled an event where a wife threw her husband out of their home through a closed window, the air was certainly blue.

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